It was a dark, gloomy night in
glamour.
Poor old rusty the cat was wide awake in her
dark green basket on a
huge ship her teeth were numb and her stomach was full of kittens she knew
something bad would happen.
She could hear the wind swirling and
the waves crashing against her ship.
Suddenly there was a tiny meow! Rusty
looked down my first kitten i will call her pepper went to explore justed then then the boat broke the half
pepper was on was sinking help shed meowed “go swimming” Pepper said she couldn’t swim but rusty
coun’nt hear her
The next day the sun woke up pepper
had washed up on an island she was weak a her leg was broken but someone else had been washed up too.
“Pepper “ shouted rusty it was Rusty
She lifted pepper to
the vet To get her leg fixed.
You have some great ideas Tegan. Could you have used more punctuation to help the piece of writing flow more. Try reading your work out loud , I find this helps me.
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