One cold, dark, spooky night when I was in the Elephant cage I heard a crash and saw a big shadow appear suddenly in front of me. I didn't know what the shadow was. Was it a monster? Was it a animal? Was it an alien? What was the noise? Was it a crash into the tree? I just knew this would be a spooky freaky job.
I researched it up but it looked like no one had found it before so I created a new website on the Internet and called it the fear monster.
I grabbed my torch out of my pocket. I shone it near the shadow and there was a monster
"Aaah" I shouted I set a trap but I wonder what it eats? So I chucked a bit of chilly in the trap. Two minutes later... slam went the door! "Hurrah" I cheered.I researched it up but it looked like no one had found it before so I created a new website on the Internet and called it the fear monster.
I think this is a really good piece of writing Tegan! There is excellent use of punctuation throughout which makes the story more dramatic to read and makes it really engaging.
ReplyDeletewell done!
To Jordon B and Mr Kenyon
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From Tegan