One day Bella woke up at midnight Bella's kitten Lilly talked it said (we need to go to the moon) Bella said (OK) she snuck out of bed she made some samwiches and 3 apples for her kitten Lilly and a different person and herself .She rushed out side with her kitten Lilly Bella decided to build a rocket Lilly helped build it as well in anther two minutes they were done Bella and Lilly jumped in the colourful rocket and blasted into space up to the moon when they hit the moon The rocket stooped .There was one little blue alien next to a banner saying welcome to the moon Bella and Lilly walked out the moon was bouncy they walked past the little blue alien but the alien fowlod Bella and Lilly Bella thought that he wanted some food so she sat on a crater and gave some food to the alien and Lilly and then they played games until Lilly and Bella did have to go home.
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ReplyDeleteI like your story what was you learning goal for your writing?.
p.s thank you for all the comments. Im going to leave you heaps now.
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To Serena
ReplyDeleteMy writing goal for this piece of writing was not to use too many thens.
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ReplyDeleteAwesome writing. Next time you could write bella and the slimey alien.
From Titus
I love it that Bella took her kitten to the moon. I wonder what the kitten thought of the bouncy surface? I think I would have wanted to take the alien home with me, would you?
ReplyDeleteWell done for taking part this week.
Some fab descriptions there, well done! Perhaps next time you could try splitting up some of your brilliant ideas into seperate sentences using full stops? :)Well done though!
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